Tuesday, September 29, 2009
Text for Tuesday's Discussion & Other Info
1. Craig Raine: "A Martian Sends a Postcard Home"
2. Things you should know when you leave class today:
Descriptive Writing Techniques: Sensory Details and Figurative Language
Figurative Language Modes: Metaphor (simile, kennings, personification)
Cliches
3. Get ready for the next essay:
Creative Essay #1: Observation & Description from an Alien’s perspective
We’re taking our cue from Craig Raine and his “Martian Sends a Postcard Home” poem. First of all, this fits with our theme; an outsider’s perspective on human behavior shows us how one (non-human) individual perceives our system(s). Secondly, Raine uses a wonderful figurative language to make his observations (more on that in a second).
So, your job is to choose something to observe—something ordinary, something strange, something social, something domestic, something with other humans, something with animals, something with children, something with nature or machines . . . something you can look at for a good 30 minutes and then write about for 4 pages.
Here’s the catch: you must play the part of “individual versus system.” You must observe this thing as if you are not human; your descriptions should employ the figurative language tricks we have picked up from Raine and our RRs (also, we’ll have a lot class time devoted to figurative language exercises). There might be times, in the essay, in which you have to break back into your normal, human voice and explain yourself and how it was to observe and then describe. That’s fine, but focus on writing descriptions from an alien’s perspective.
You can use the double-entry chart I give you in class while conducting your observation. You will need to look over your notes and consider what will be your thesis. There should be one, clear sentence that is your thesis. What overall impression do you want the reader to have? You should use your introduction to present your thesis. Then, the body of your essay can be devoted to supporting it with details and descriptions. Seriously consider your method of organization, based on our class discussions. Also consider all the terminology under figurative language: metaphor, simile, personification, kennings. And don’t forget about the role of sensory description. How would an alien have sensory experiences? Finally, and oh-so-importantly, avoid clichés; they’re boring, and aliens would not use them.
Checklist:
-A good topic/location
-An observation chart that is attached to your FD
-A thesis statement
-An organizational pattern
-Use of figurative language and sensory details
Align your work with the rubric:
• Observation/Description FD is worth 40 points.
• The thesis accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Development accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Organization accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Written conventions are an issue on this essay, but will be graded only in a punitive sense. At this point, you should know our class list of grammatical and mechanical errors, and you should apply that knowledge to your own proofreading. If you have repetitive errors from our list or errors that consistently interfere with meaning, you will lose 5 points.
• Style accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
Notes from our syllabus:
RD: Due in class (should be 2 complete pages; 10 points)
FD: Due to me in hard copy (3-4 complete pages; graded according to our rubric and worth 30 points)
2. Things you should know when you leave class today:
Descriptive Writing Techniques: Sensory Details and Figurative Language
Figurative Language Modes: Metaphor (simile, kennings, personification)
Cliches
3. Get ready for the next essay:
Creative Essay #1: Observation & Description from an Alien’s perspective
We’re taking our cue from Craig Raine and his “Martian Sends a Postcard Home” poem. First of all, this fits with our theme; an outsider’s perspective on human behavior shows us how one (non-human) individual perceives our system(s). Secondly, Raine uses a wonderful figurative language to make his observations (more on that in a second).
So, your job is to choose something to observe—something ordinary, something strange, something social, something domestic, something with other humans, something with animals, something with children, something with nature or machines . . . something you can look at for a good 30 minutes and then write about for 4 pages.
Here’s the catch: you must play the part of “individual versus system.” You must observe this thing as if you are not human; your descriptions should employ the figurative language tricks we have picked up from Raine and our RRs (also, we’ll have a lot class time devoted to figurative language exercises). There might be times, in the essay, in which you have to break back into your normal, human voice and explain yourself and how it was to observe and then describe. That’s fine, but focus on writing descriptions from an alien’s perspective.
You can use the double-entry chart I give you in class while conducting your observation. You will need to look over your notes and consider what will be your thesis. There should be one, clear sentence that is your thesis. What overall impression do you want the reader to have? You should use your introduction to present your thesis. Then, the body of your essay can be devoted to supporting it with details and descriptions. Seriously consider your method of organization, based on our class discussions. Also consider all the terminology under figurative language: metaphor, simile, personification, kennings. And don’t forget about the role of sensory description. How would an alien have sensory experiences? Finally, and oh-so-importantly, avoid clichés; they’re boring, and aliens would not use them.
Checklist:
-A good topic/location
-An observation chart that is attached to your FD
-A thesis statement
-An organizational pattern
-Use of figurative language and sensory details
Align your work with the rubric:
• Observation/Description FD is worth 40 points.
• The thesis accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Development accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Organization accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Written conventions are an issue on this essay, but will be graded only in a punitive sense. At this point, you should know our class list of grammatical and mechanical errors, and you should apply that knowledge to your own proofreading. If you have repetitive errors from our list or errors that consistently interfere with meaning, you will lose 5 points.
• Style accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
Notes from our syllabus:
RD: Due in class (should be 2 complete pages; 10 points)
FD: Due to me in hard copy (3-4 complete pages; graded according to our rubric and worth 30 points)
Sunday, September 20, 2009
Not an English 101 issue, but a school-wide concern:
We'll have a brief talk in class about being healthy and safe during flu season. As a member of the OCC community, you should look at this.
Thursday, September 17, 2009
Some information
On Thursday, we begin watching the film North Country. It fits our theme, "Individuals vs. Systems," in lots of different ways. Here are some links for more information:
The Wikipedia entry
Some information about sexual harassment
An interview with the lawyers involved in the case
Think about how the film connects to other texts we've examined. Think, also, about how the writers of the film are using some of the same tricks/techinques as did Bob Dylan when he wrote "The Lonesome Ballad of Hattie Carroll" (the song we listened to).
The Wikipedia entry
Some information about sexual harassment
An interview with the lawyers involved in the case
Think about how the film connects to other texts we've examined. Think, also, about how the writers of the film are using some of the same tricks/techinques as did Bob Dylan when he wrote "The Lonesome Ballad of Hattie Carroll" (the song we listened to).
Tuesday, September 15, 2009
Tuesday's Class
a) Grammar Lesson
b) Peer Review
c) Two image-texts:
1) Vostell's "Miss America"
2) The New York Times' "Faces of the Dead"
b) Peer Review
c) Two image-texts:
1) Vostell's "Miss America"
2) The New York Times' "Faces of the Dead"
Thursday, September 10, 2009
Definition Essay
ROUGH DRAFT #1 IS DUE ON TUESDAY
#1: Definition Essay
A definition essay attempts to answer one of the following questions: 1. What does ____ mean? 2. What is the special/true nature of ____? 3. What other, less obvious, meaning(s) does ____ have?
Your job is to think of some of the words (themes, concepts) that have come up in our readings and discussions. Everything fits into our class theme; consider Hattie Carroll (in the Bob Dylan song), the author of the blog “Baghdad Burning,” the author of the blog “A Soldier’s Thoughts,” Barbara Ehrenreich’s experience in various jobs (Nickel and Dimed), and Stephen Elliott’s struggles as a homeless teenager in Chicago (“Where I Slept”). What are the words we use to talk about individual struggles against “systems”? Well, for one, we use the words “individual” and “system.” We also use “alienation” and “disenfranchisement.” What, would you say, are the definitions of these words? Also, how would you support that definition with evidence? Have you seen examples of these themes in your personal life, at school, at work, in the news, in history, on TV? What other words occur to you?
This essay, like any essay, is built on its thesis. In this case, you have a very specific format to follow for your thesis. You are going to choose a word (any of the above or any that connect to our theme) to define, and your essay will support or illustrate that definition. The definition statement itself is the thesis, and it MUST follow the guidelines below (see #2).
1. Consider your word. What do you want to say about it? What is your purpose? To inform? To persuade? To entertain? This will determine your tone.
2. Formulate your thesis; this is the definition. Your word is your “term.” For the term, you must consider “class” and “characteristics.” Remember that this is where a lot of your power is—in the kind of thing you say the term is (class), and the details you want to emphasize (characteristics). Here are some generic examples, unrelated to our theme: term=peregrine falcon, class=an endangered bird, characteristic=fastest flyer, or term=happiness, class=a goal, characteristic=hard to achieve, or term=children, class=small humans, characteristic=very loud. Do you see how it works?
3. Your next step is to turn those components into a clear thesis statement. You should consider our discussions on sentence structure and style. How will you pack a lot of punch? Example from above: Happiness, a goal, is hard to achieve. I put the three parts into a sentence that has a subject, verb, and expresses a complete thought. Here’s another: Children are small humans who are know to be very loud. Can you see the components?
4. Write an effective introduction. Lead us to your statement. Do you need to give a little background? Set a scene? Explain how your definition is better than the dictionary definition?
5. Support your thesis with one clear example or many small examples. You can use observations, stories, interviews, comparison & contrast . . . and certainly any of the writing tricks you’ve collected in your RRs.
6. Don’t forget about denotation vs. connotation.
7. Don’t be afraid of controversial or “loaded” words.
8. Consider how meanings change over time, for individuals or groups.
9. Avoid circular definitions.
10. Get rid of superfluous material.
Checklist:
-4 complete pages, double-spaced
-Title (not just the word itself)
-A term that somehow connects to our class theme
-A thesis statement that has all three components (term, class, characteristic(s)) and is a grammatically correct sentence
-Evidence for your thesis that avoids repetition or empty statements
(Hey! Something good to know for future writing projects outside of 101: creating a definition is a useful tool in argumentation and might also be used as one small part of a larger paper.)
Align your work with the rubric:
• Definition Essay FD is worth 20 points.
• The thesis accounts for 7 points (6-7 excellent, 5 good, 3-4 adequate, 1-2 inadequate).
• Development accounts for 5 points (5 excellent, 3-4 good, 2 adequate, 1 adequate).
• Organization accounts for 4 points (4 excellent, 3 good, 2 adequate, 1 inadequate).
• Written conventions account for 4 points. On this essay, our main concern is avoiding errors that interfere with meaning. Your goal is to proofread for your own errors, keeping things clear and under control. You should have no more than four errors that interfere with meaning; for each one beyond that, you’ll be deducted one point. As we go, you will have to be more and more mindful of what issues we have covered in class.
• Style will not be graded on this essay.
Notes from our syllabus:
RD1: Due in class (should be 2 complete pages; 20 points for bringing it and participating in Peer Review)
RD2: Due to me in hard copy (should be 3 complete pages; 10 points for following guidelines and submitting it for review)
FD: Due to me in hard copy (4 complete pages; graded according to our rubric and worth 20 points)
#1: Definition Essay
A definition essay attempts to answer one of the following questions: 1. What does ____ mean? 2. What is the special/true nature of ____? 3. What other, less obvious, meaning(s) does ____ have?
Your job is to think of some of the words (themes, concepts) that have come up in our readings and discussions. Everything fits into our class theme; consider Hattie Carroll (in the Bob Dylan song), the author of the blog “Baghdad Burning,” the author of the blog “A Soldier’s Thoughts,” Barbara Ehrenreich’s experience in various jobs (Nickel and Dimed), and Stephen Elliott’s struggles as a homeless teenager in Chicago (“Where I Slept”). What are the words we use to talk about individual struggles against “systems”? Well, for one, we use the words “individual” and “system.” We also use “alienation” and “disenfranchisement.” What, would you say, are the definitions of these words? Also, how would you support that definition with evidence? Have you seen examples of these themes in your personal life, at school, at work, in the news, in history, on TV? What other words occur to you?
This essay, like any essay, is built on its thesis. In this case, you have a very specific format to follow for your thesis. You are going to choose a word (any of the above or any that connect to our theme) to define, and your essay will support or illustrate that definition. The definition statement itself is the thesis, and it MUST follow the guidelines below (see #2).
1. Consider your word. What do you want to say about it? What is your purpose? To inform? To persuade? To entertain? This will determine your tone.
2. Formulate your thesis; this is the definition. Your word is your “term.” For the term, you must consider “class” and “characteristics.” Remember that this is where a lot of your power is—in the kind of thing you say the term is (class), and the details you want to emphasize (characteristics). Here are some generic examples, unrelated to our theme: term=peregrine falcon, class=an endangered bird, characteristic=fastest flyer, or term=happiness, class=a goal, characteristic=hard to achieve, or term=children, class=small humans, characteristic=very loud. Do you see how it works?
3. Your next step is to turn those components into a clear thesis statement. You should consider our discussions on sentence structure and style. How will you pack a lot of punch? Example from above: Happiness, a goal, is hard to achieve. I put the three parts into a sentence that has a subject, verb, and expresses a complete thought. Here’s another: Children are small humans who are know to be very loud. Can you see the components?
4. Write an effective introduction. Lead us to your statement. Do you need to give a little background? Set a scene? Explain how your definition is better than the dictionary definition?
5. Support your thesis with one clear example or many small examples. You can use observations, stories, interviews, comparison & contrast . . . and certainly any of the writing tricks you’ve collected in your RRs.
6. Don’t forget about denotation vs. connotation.
7. Don’t be afraid of controversial or “loaded” words.
8. Consider how meanings change over time, for individuals or groups.
9. Avoid circular definitions.
10. Get rid of superfluous material.
Checklist:
-4 complete pages, double-spaced
-Title (not just the word itself)
-A term that somehow connects to our class theme
-A thesis statement that has all three components (term, class, characteristic(s)) and is a grammatically correct sentence
-Evidence for your thesis that avoids repetition or empty statements
(Hey! Something good to know for future writing projects outside of 101: creating a definition is a useful tool in argumentation and might also be used as one small part of a larger paper.)
Align your work with the rubric:
• Definition Essay FD is worth 20 points.
• The thesis accounts for 7 points (6-7 excellent, 5 good, 3-4 adequate, 1-2 inadequate).
• Development accounts for 5 points (5 excellent, 3-4 good, 2 adequate, 1 adequate).
• Organization accounts for 4 points (4 excellent, 3 good, 2 adequate, 1 inadequate).
• Written conventions account for 4 points. On this essay, our main concern is avoiding errors that interfere with meaning. Your goal is to proofread for your own errors, keeping things clear and under control. You should have no more than four errors that interfere with meaning; for each one beyond that, you’ll be deducted one point. As we go, you will have to be more and more mindful of what issues we have covered in class.
• Style will not be graded on this essay.
Notes from our syllabus:
RD1: Due in class (should be 2 complete pages; 20 points for bringing it and participating in Peer Review)
RD2: Due to me in hard copy (should be 3 complete pages; 10 points for following guidelines and submitting it for review)
FD: Due to me in hard copy (4 complete pages; graded according to our rubric and worth 20 points)
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