Text for Tuesday's Discussion & Other Info

1. Craig Raine: "A Martian Sends a Postcard Home"

2. Things you should know when you leave class today:

Descriptive Writing Techniques: Sensory Details and Figurative Language
Figurative Language Modes: Metaphor (simile, kennings, personification)
Cliches

3. Get ready for the next essay:

Creative Essay #1: Observation & Description from an Alien’s perspective

We’re taking our cue from Craig Raine and his “Martian Sends a Postcard Home” poem. First of all, this fits with our theme; an outsider’s perspective on human behavior shows us how one (non-human) individual perceives our system(s). Secondly, Raine uses a wonderful figurative language to make his observations (more on that in a second).

So, your job is to choose something to observe—something ordinary, something strange, something social, something domestic, something with other humans, something with animals, something with children, something with nature or machines . . . something you can look at for a good 30 minutes and then write about for 4 pages.

Here’s the catch: you must play the part of “individual versus system.” You must observe this thing as if you are not human; your descriptions should employ the figurative language tricks we have picked up from Raine and our RRs (also, we’ll have a lot class time devoted to figurative language exercises). There might be times, in the essay, in which you have to break back into your normal, human voice and explain yourself and how it was to observe and then describe. That’s fine, but focus on writing descriptions from an alien’s perspective.

You can use the double-entry chart I give you in class while conducting your observation. You will need to look over your notes and consider what will be your thesis. There should be one, clear sentence that is your thesis. What overall impression do you want the reader to have? You should use your introduction to present your thesis. Then, the body of your essay can be devoted to supporting it with details and descriptions. Seriously consider your method of organization, based on our class discussions. Also consider all the terminology under figurative language: metaphor, simile, personification, kennings. And don’t forget about the role of sensory description. How would an alien have sensory experiences? Finally, and oh-so-importantly, avoid clichés; they’re boring, and aliens would not use them.

Checklist:
-A good topic/location
-An observation chart that is attached to your FD
-A thesis statement
-An organizational pattern
-Use of figurative language and sensory details

Align your work with the rubric:
• Observation/Description FD is worth 40 points.
• The thesis accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Development accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Organization accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).
• Written conventions are an issue on this essay, but will be graded only in a punitive sense. At this point, you should know our class list of grammatical and mechanical errors, and you should apply that knowledge to your own proofreading. If you have repetitive errors from our list or errors that consistently interfere with meaning, you will lose 5 points.
• Style accounts for 10 points (9-10 excellent, 7-8 good, 4-6 adequate, 1-3 inadequate).

Notes from our syllabus:
RD: Due in class (should be 2 complete pages; 10 points)
FD: Due to me in hard copy (3-4 complete pages; graded according to our rubric and worth 30 points)